Before reading this: know that i still dont have a solid idea as to what i am doing.....
1.
“…Well open up your mind and see like me
Open up your plans and then you’re free
Look into your heart and you’ll find love love love love…”
The sound of Jason Mraz singing, the cool breeze of the lake, and the stars above our heads filled me with peace. My family and I were at a Mraz concert downtown. Sitting in the highest row didn’t matter because we were together. I felt at ease, but then a vibration came from my pocket. Text Message! It was my best friend Chelsea.
C: I miss youuu biffy
M: I miss you too!
C: I feel like this year we got so much closer at camp, like when people ask who my best friend is I say you no matter what.
M: I totally agree. We got so much closer and I can’t even explain how happy I am that we did. Like you know so much more about me compared to my friends here. No comparison.
C: yes exactlyyyyyy. No comparison what so ever. Like I want you at my wedding standing up there with meee.
M: totally same here! Because we are biffys forevsies:)
C: Biffys Forevsies. I love youuuu!
M: I love you too!
“…Listen to the music of the moment people, dance and sing
We’re just one big family
And it’s our God-forsaken right to be loved loved loved loved loved…”
2.
Chelsea and I have known each other for three years. She lives all the way in Detroit so I only get to see her three times a year, unless we visit each other more. We are biffys forevsies, in proper English best friend forever. When we are together, most the time we are tied to the hips.
3.
Loyalty.
Trust.
Honesty.
Respect.
Confidence.
Love.
Fun.
This makes a true friend.
“…Well open up your mind and see like me
Open up your plans and then you’re free
Look into your heart and you’ll find love love love love…”
The sound of Jason Mraz singing, the cool breeze of the lake, and the stars above our heads filled me with peace. My family and I were at a Mraz concert downtown. Sitting in the highest row didn’t matter because we were together. I felt at ease, but then a vibration came from my pocket. Text Message! It was my best friend Chelsea.
C: I miss youuu biffy
M: I miss you too!
C: I feel like this year we got so much closer at camp, like when people ask who my best friend is I say you no matter what.
M: I totally agree. We got so much closer and I can’t even explain how happy I am that we did. Like you know so much more about me compared to my friends here. No comparison.
C: yes exactlyyyyyy. No comparison what so ever. Like I want you at my wedding standing up there with meee.
M: totally same here! Because we are biffys forevsies:)
C: Biffys Forevsies. I love youuuu!
M: I love you too!
“…Listen to the music of the moment people, dance and sing
We’re just one big family
And it’s our God-forsaken right to be loved loved loved loved loved…”
2.
Chelsea and I have known each other for three years. She lives all the way in Detroit so I only get to see her three times a year, unless we visit each other more. We are biffys forevsies, in proper English best friend forever. When we are together, most the time we are tied to the hips.
3.
Loyalty.
Trust.
Honesty.
Respect.
Confidence.
Love.
Fun.
This makes a true friend.
Hey Melissa!
ReplyDeleteAt first, I like your beginning. =) I like this song and I think it is good to start with that and continue with the qoute later. Really good.
I think it is a good idea to write using your phone messages. But did you really write it like that? Don´t you usually write shorter an more in "message-language"? I would do that here, otherwise I think it doesn´t sound that good.
But I love your third paragraph where you just have one word in a sentence. That is really good.
I would continue with that idea, also with the song, I think you can write a great essay with that! As I already mentioned, I would just think about the language when you write these message qoutes.
Veronika
Melissa!! This is really good. I love how when your reading it, you can imagine yourself in the texting conversation. :) haha. I think the only thing to focus on would be grammar and spelling, but thats already pretty good. Oh and by the way...I am so sorry mine paper is not up yet. I've been working on it and am almost done! So it'll be up soon.
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